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I should've known by the look in your eyes;
The way you eyed me was sharp precision.
Searing me in half and staring straight into my soul.
Those strikingly blue eyes made for killing
And I was your new prey,
A wounded animal stuck gawking into the headlights of a speeding car.

Your smile should've set off some alarms.
The slight curving of suspicious lips
Murderously captivating me with a set of well said words.
It was breathtaking really;
That dark, mysterious, poisonous grin that you gave to me
Or rather, let me rent for a couple hours.

I should've realized by the way you held me;
The way your hands latched on at my hips
Screaming "This is mine,"
Trapping me against you
As you pulled me in by just another lustful kiss.

By then, you think I would've grasped that I was your paper towel lover.
Easy, affordable, disposable.
The perfect type for one like you.
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Lol, I have no idea where this even came from.
I guess I've been reading too much poetry lately.
This is the first real poem I've written that wasn't an assignment, so I'm absolutely sure it's full of flaws.
On top of that, this is unfinished and I still wanna fix it up a bit ^^;
Thanks for reading nonetheless. ♥
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:iconmoonlightwillow6:
The cynical feel to this was amazing. I just loved the sarcastic tone so much... I don't know, it just fit perfectly. I especially liked the comparisons to paper towels, it made for an interesting piece.

Excellent job!
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~EtchedinDreams Nov 7, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :hug:
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:iconmoonlightwillow6:
You're welcome! It was an excellent piece. :D
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~EtchedinDreams Nov 8, 2011  Student Writer
Wahh, you're sweet, thanks again! :D
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~annabanana9198 Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i liek.
its pretty serious until the end xD
amazing.
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~EtchedinDreams Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you! ^^ :hug:
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~annabanana9198 Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you're welcome c:
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~TheSimpsonsFanGirl Aug 8, 2011  Student General Artist
FANCAYYYYY!
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~EtchedinDreams Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
:iconyesindeedplz:
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~TheSimpsonsFanGirl Aug 8, 2011  Student General Artist
:iconisayplz:
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